by sarah leanne
Member since:
October 30, 2012

Satwe-01/19/2013-Heart's Poison--Iambic Pentameter

January 19, 2013 01:55 AM UTC (Updated: February 06, 2013 07:30 AM UTC)
views: 0 | 10 people recommend this | comments: 13

Poison as pure as hate abounds in me,

And yet I hold in hand my heart: a vial

In which I keep this fatal chemical.

Its potency is fierce! A drop as small

And faint as dew upon a blade of grass

Is apt enough to still a beating heart.

My vile heart, this vial! I can distinguish not

Betwixt the two, for both are brimming

Containers bottling identic venom.

O, loving Hate, thou art my heart's poison.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Comments: 13

Bernard C. Jan 19, 2013, 4:52am UTC
Somethings more harder to swallow but keeps it all going - Nice write :-)

Thank you for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
JOHN BECK Jan 19, 2013, 9:09am UTC
Excellent play on words and contrasting emotions.
Richard Lynn Livesay Jan 19, 2013, 10:50am UTC
great expression..Loving hate showing the dicotomies in our world and how easy ir is to get inbetween them

Featured on Surreal Circus
sarah leanne Jan 20, 2013, 12:49am UTC
thanks!!
Len Maxwell Jan 19, 2013, 8:16pm UTC
Very nicely written. I'll have to say that the second and third lines were the most telling for me.

Thanks for taking the SatWE challenge and I'm pleased to feature your work on Gather Writing Essential.
sarah leanne Jan 20, 2013, 12:48am UTC
AWW THANKS!!
A. F. Stewart Jan 20, 2013, 8:22am UTC
An intense and eloquent poem.
sarah leanne Jan 20, 2013, 11:36am UTC
Thanks. I fear the day when readers will start to get bored from my negativity..I can't help it. Anyways I couldnt sleep last night so I drew a pictur to go with this poem..I will post it later..took 4 hours..Your compliments mean a great amount to me. (thought I should share that with you)
A. F. Stewart Jan 20, 2013, 2:20pm UTC
I doubt anyone will ever get bored with your poetry.
Janice F. Jan 21, 2013, 8:31pm UTC
Loved this! You did a wonderful job!
sarah leanne Jan 21, 2013, 9:14pm UTC
thanks
Irina Dimitric Feb 6, 2013, 7:40pm UTC
very powerful poem...great imagery...I know what hate feels like...you expressed it so well
sarah leanne Feb 6, 2013, 7:41pm UTC
well I am glad I am not the only one :D

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